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- Ben Lavine
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- Location: Portland, OR
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- "Don't You Have Some Homework To Do?"
- Summary: Eating toast, watching TV, playing guitar, these are the things David Barber-Callaghan likes to do on the weekend. But his father has a different idea of what the weekend is for.
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Review of Procrastination
Ben Lavine
Posted on July 26, 2005 at 03:14 PM
Hah. Homework. Yeah, I think we've all been there. Nagging parents, piles of pointless paperwork... Well, thank goodness I've graduated.
Yeah, this piece was definitley amusing, but there are two main things that I would work on/change. First off, the narration is so choppy! You should try to make it flow a little more, instead of being so stacato. Second, for just some of the time, the guitar playing was a little loud, and made it a little hard to hear you, but it wasn't like that all the time.
I did like how it was written though, and I also liked how you got your (I assume) dad to nag for the sake of the piece. Yeah, good job.