Nice effort by Kady Bulnes to tell the story of Wally and Esther which eventually led her to think about her abuelita.
Writing is crisp and clean.
Stories are sweet and poignant. Loved the story by Kady about her and abuelita in church.
However, there were some confusing points that often detracted from the story.
Needed an introduction. Who is Wally and why a story about him?
Confused by the male moderator in the middle of the piece, who turned out to be Wally. I wasn't sure who this person was when I first heard him tell the story of Kady and abuelita. That needed to be made clearer at the beginning of his narration instead of at the end of piece when he talks about the death of Esther.
Would have been better if Kady told her own story instead of having Wally read it.
What was more effective was hearing Wally tell us how Kady's story made him reflect on Esther's death.
And to have Kady herself tell us how Esther made her think of her grandmother.
Review of Esther and Abuelita
Traci Tong
Posted on May 12, 2006 at 09:29 AM
Nice effort by Kady Bulnes to tell the story of Wally and Esther which eventually led her to think about her abuelita.
Writing is crisp and clean.
Stories are sweet and poignant. Loved the story by Kady about her and abuelita in church.
However, there were some confusing points that often detracted from the story.
Needed an introduction. Who is Wally and why a story about him?
Confused by the male moderator in the middle of the piece, who turned out to be Wally. I wasn't sure who this person was when I first heard him tell the story of Kady and abuelita. That needed to be made clearer at the beginning of his narration instead of at the end of piece when he talks about the death of Esther.
Would have been better if Kady told her own story instead of having Wally read it.
What was more effective was hearing Wally tell us how Kady's story made him reflect on Esther's death.
And to have Kady herself tell us how Esther made her think of her grandmother.
All in all, nice piece.