Comments by Phil Corriveau

Comment for "Universal Design in Japan"

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Review of Universal Design in Japan

Universal Design is a nice soft feature piece about the increasing trend to use automated voices integrated into product design in Japan. In the piece, we hear automated voices at the train station, in vending machines, crosswalks, parking garages, ski lifts, and household appliances. It's a nice blend of natural sound and interviews, held together with narration from producer Ross Chambless. The piece covers a lot of ground, maybe too much for a single feature, and as a result it sometimes starts to lose focus. Overall, it is a nice, sound rich feature that would be compatible with a magazine program like All Things Considered.

Comment for "The Physics of Peace"

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Review of The Physics of Peace

This first person essay takes a great topic and presents it in a way that would be good for print, but does not work so well for radio. The 25 seconds of intro music is more than twice as long as is warranted, and it's repeated again at the end. The delivery is weak and uninspired, detracting from the subject matter. The content of the commentary is good, but it is too long and unfocused to hold interest in radio. I would edit the five minute piece down to two minutes and strengthen the narration to make it more appropriate for radio.

Comment for "Photographic Molestation (#156)"

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Review of Photographic Molestation (#156)

I love the content of this piece, and of the "Ethically Speaking" series in general, but I don't like the way it translates into radio. The dialogue over an ethical question between producers Dean Ritz and Deni Elliot is a bit too contrived and "cute" for my taste, even though it does get the point across. In listening to the piece, I can't help but think of it as a module in an ethics training CD, rather than a self-contained radio piece. After the banter, listeners are told to send their comments to a web site, which doesn't do much for the effectiveness of the piece by itself. The credits alone take 15 seconds in a two minute piece, and I get the feeling I'm listening to something that was done more for the benefit of the grantor than the listener. As I said, I think the content is excellent, but in reviewing the piece for radio broadcast it comes up short for me.

Comment for "Love & Borscht in Alaska"

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Review of Love & Borscht in Alaska

Producer Rebecca Sheir has a talent for elevating a simple feature to a rich sound portrait through the use of crisp writing, a wonderful interview subject, and a warm narration delivery. In this story about the owner of a Russian cafe in a tiny Alaskan village, one can almost taste the food that she describes. Ambient sound is used parsimoniously and effectively, and the piece is nicely edited. This is a great "soft" feature that would work well in any magazine program.

Comment for "Different Judases I Have Known" (deleted)

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Review of Different Judases I Have Known (deleted)

Commentator Paul McDonald has a nice and easy way about his writing and delivery that works well for radio. His topics are interesting, and he doesn't take himself too seriously. If you like his tongue-in-cheek humorous style, as I do, this piece will not disappoint.

Comment for "The Life Of Pie"

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Review of The Life Of Pie

This piece is part of the CBC series "Outfront", a collection of first person documentaries. To my ear, this piece is way too contrived, and seems a complicated and unsuccessful effort to duplicate what the first person essay series "This I Believe" does so effectively. Where "This I Believe" is powerful, "Outfront" just calls attention to itself. It's too rehearsed, and you can almost see where the script says "chuckle here" or "cue the sigh". The production is painful, unnecessarily complicated and drawn out. By the time it grinds to its excruciating end, I don't care about the memories or feelings of the subject anymore, I just want it to be over.

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Review of Ethically Speaking (deleted)

I love the content of this piece, and of the "Ethically Speaking" series in general, but I don't like the way it translates into radio. The dialogue over an ethical question between producers Dean Ritz and Deni Elliot is a bit too contrived and "cute" for my taste, even though it does get the point across. In listening to the piece, I can't help but think of it as a module in an ethics training CD, rather than a self-contained radio piece. After the banter, listeners are told to send their comments to a web site, which doesn't do much for the effectiveness of the piece by itself. The credits alone take 15 seconds in a two minute piece, and I get the feeling I'm listening to something that was done more for the benefit of the grantor than the listener. As I said, I think the content is excellent, but in reviewing the piece for radio broadcast it comes up short for me.

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Review of This I Believe (deleted)

This is the second year of production of "This I Believe" first person essays, and they just keep getting better. The deceptively simple format consists of a short essay describing the core values that guide the lives of people from all walks of life, sandwiched between a brief open and close by narrator Jay Allison. No music, sound effects, actualities or vox pops; just crisp and powerful writing and delivery which is incredibly effective. The essays are personal and from the heart, and paint a mental image which is the hallmark of good radio. This series really demonstrates the best of what our industry has to offer, and I hope it continues for many years.

Comment for "Utopia Net"

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Review of Utopia Net

Spectrum Radio always does a good job making scientific ideas understandable to the lay person, and this piece is no exception. Utopia stands for "Utah Telecommunications Open Infrastructure Agency", an optical fiber open internet based municipal network linking 14 cities in Utah and providing television, telephone and high speed broadband. The use of sound is minimal; but in fairness, it's pretty difficult to get much sound when the topic is movement of data. The interview cuts are adequate, and the narration flows nicely, but the beauty of this piece lies in the crisp writing style which is a trademark of Spectrum Radio, a monthly tech-news magazine program.

Comment for "21-year-old Katrina survivor signing up for U.S. Army"

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Review of 21-year-old Katrina survivor signing up for U.S. Army

I'll start by saying that this is a very powerful piece. After a 30 second introduction by producer Adeline Goss, the rest of the piece consists of narration by the young man who survived Katrina. It's a heart wrenching and gripping story, and the voice of the young man is captivating. But the piece lacks some production elements that would have made it even more powerful. Some editing and narration, or at least some questions from the interviewer would help his story flow better. Although the story pulls us in, it drags a bit near the end, and then the interview just ends, making the listener feel like the piece isn't quite finished. The raw material for this piece is incredible, and some judicious editing would bring out its full potential.

Comment for "OLD AUDIO Radio Love" (deleted)

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Review of Radio Love (deleted)

Wow! This sound rich montage was produced by Tiffany Patterson as part of a class for Brooklyn College's radio station, and it is very well done. It's a nice piece of "word jazz", combining elements of music, poetry, sound, narration and a wonderful bit with a New York rapper about radio. Midway through the piece, the producer says, "radio is always there, providing a sound track for your life, helping you store memories", and that's as apt a description for good radio, and for this piece, as I can find. Although it was produced for a class, this is a beautifully produced sound essay, and with a bit of editing and remixing I think it will sound every bit as good as the "pros", and it is certainly broadcast quality as is. You owe it to yourself to listen to this delightful and wonderfully refreshing piece of radio, and I look forward to hearing more from Brooklyn College Radio.

Comment for "The Education of Teens: An Interview With Shelby Knox"

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Review of The Education of Teens: An Interview With Shelby Knox

This is one of a series of pieces produced by Youth Spin, a youth radio program in Austin, Texas aimed at high school students. It is a straight interview by producer Zoe Cordes Selbin with sex education activist Shelby Knox, but we don't know that until the very end of the piece, when the host and guest are introduced; there is no setup, and it plunges straight into the interview. The information presented is good, but the presentation suffers; many of the questions sound as if they are being read from a script, and don't necessarily flow as a conversation. The piece would be improved if there were an introduction, and if the interviewer listened to the responses before asking the next question. But it's a good effort from this group of young people on a good topic.

Comment for "You Are Here: 1000 years of mapmaking history in one brief segment"

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Review of You Are Here: 1000 years of mapmaking history in one brief segment

There is an awful lot of information densely packed into this nine minute piece; perhaps too much. I listened to it three times, and picked up something new each time. The production is good and the material well presented, but I sometimes found myself reaching for the rewind button to better understand what was being said. The topic itself is fascinating, and as is said in the piece, "it is extraordinary how poorly educated Americans are about geography". If nothing else, this piece taught me how little I know about mapmaking. Producer Jackson Braider does a good job of fitting a lot of information into the piece, and introduces the idea of ethnocentrism in mapmaking; looking at the world through one's own cultural frame. Although I enjoyed listening to the feature, this is one of the few times I would suggest that a nine minute piece be expanded into a half-hour or hour long documentary.

Comment for "A Voice in the Crowd" (deleted)

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Review of A Voice in the Crowd (deleted)

"A Voice in the Crowd" is actually four humorous commentaries ranging in length from a minute and a half to two minutes each. Ron Bloomberg picks topics from everyday life, and turns minor annoyances into amusing satirical musings. Think Louis Black, but more sophisticated and less bombastic. These pieces are very well written and Bloomberg's reading is spot on. They would add a bit of light-hearted humor to a magazine show, and would work well as a transition between longer segments.

Comment for "Michael and the Mare"

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Review of Michael and the Mare

The storytelling is superb, marred only by the poor quality of the recording. Producer Jackson Braider skillfully mixes music with the voice of Irish storyteller Bob O'Connell, recorded in 1962. The strength of the story almost carries it off, but the recording sounds as if it had been filtered through a telephone, and the piece is far too long to sustain listener engagement with that sound quality, in my opinion. It is a good archival piece, but questionable for radio.

Comment for "Hollywood's Prayer"

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Review of Hollywood's Prayer

This is a simple and powerful essay by artist David Greenberger. He is a master at blending narration and music to draw the listener in. The narration ends at 1:40, with music fill to 3:25. The narrative and music remind me of Ira Glass and This American Life. I highly recommend this piece.

Comment for "Voices of New Orleans"

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Review of Voices of New Orleans

I'll start by saying that this is a very powerful piece. After a 30 second introduction by producer Adeline Goss, the rest of the piece consists of narration by the young man who survived Katrina. It's a heart wrenching and gripping story, and the voice of the young man is captivating. But the piece lacks some production elements that would have made it even more powerful. Some editing and narration, or at least some questions from the interviewer would help his story flow better. Although the story pulls us in, it drags a bit near the end, and then the interview just ends, making the listener feel like the piece isn't quite finished. The raw material for this piece is incredible, and some judicious editing would bring out its full potential.

Comment for "Suicide's legacy in one Alaska village"

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Review of Suicide's legacy in one Alaska village

This is an excellent piece of radio produced for the Alaska Public Radio Network by Ashley Gross. It's a great example of local in depth news feature reporting at its best. Alaska's suicide rate is twice that of the US as a whole, and in the Bering Sea community of Hooper Bay it is even higher. Through interviews with local townspeople the piece explores the reasons for this phenomenon. One theory is that the people have become disconnected from their Yup'ik heritage, and perhaps one answer is to reclaim their culture. Although the piece is long by magazine standards, it flows very well and is parsimoniously written. The piece is very nicely edited, and the voices flow well from one to another. This is an example of local feature production that is as good as or better than the national radio newsmagazines.

Comment for "Captive Audience: NPR's Backseat Listeners"

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Review of Captive Audience: NPR's Backseat Listeners

Another in a series from NPR's Next Generation Radio, this piece perfectly captures the guilty pleasure that some young people take in listening to public radio. It was a bit bothersome for me that the piece equates NPR and All Things Considered with public radio and ignores the rest, but then I guess NPR is our biggest brand. Maybe it's just the public radio general manager in me coming out... Anyway, it's very well written, slickly produced and nicely narrated by producer Beth Novey. The sound bites from teenagers are priceless; I loved the line that listening to NPR is like drinking coffee - you don't like it when you're little either. This is an engaging piece that would fit well into a news magazine program like, say, All Things Considered.

Comment for "The Meaning of Morels"

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Review of The Meaning of Morels

This is the first PRX piece by journalist and writer Randall Osborne, and I like it. It's not always easy to make the transition from print to radio, but I think Osborne does it well. The writing is evocative and poignant, and the mix with simple piano music works well. The delivery is laid back and low key, which is effective for this type of piece. I enjoyed it very much, and hope to hear more from this producer.

Comment for "Remember the Time"

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Review of Remember the Time

This piece is part of a "Song and Memory" series that appears on APM's Weekend America, about recalling strong childhood memories, often through music and song. This one is about a childhood memory of being punished by a 12-year old cousin for misbehaving in school, to the tune of Michael Jackson's "Remember the Time". It is a first-person narrative superbly mixed with music and sound, and it does conjure up real images for the listener. Because the narrator is not a professional announcer it requires close listening, but the lack of professionalism in the narration lends itself to the authenticity of the memory and the story, and it works well. I really like the premise of the series, which takes "slice of life" memories and portrays them well. This is a nice piece of radio, and I highly recommend it.

Comment for "A Map of The Sea"

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Review of A Map of The Sea

This is a delightful and sound rich piece of radio that is a joy to listen to. Producer Chris Brookes skillfully weaves music, sound, interviews and narration to tell his story. The story is about the transformation of a five-century culture based on the Newfoundland commercial fishing grounds, when the cod suddenly disappeared in 1992. The culture is evolving into a heritage tourism industry based on the memory of the fishing industry. Some communities have disappeared altogether; some have been transformed. It is a haunting and sometimes sad story that makes brilliant use of sound to help tell it. In one section, the sound of a foghorn segues beautifully into an a cappella vocal piece. The artful use of sound and interviews creates a mood which is very appropriate for this piece. I highly recommend it.

Comment for "Escape Velocity"

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Review of Escape Velocity

Catie Talarski has produced an engaging piece about a group of homeless teens in Maine writing and performing theatre pieces based on their experiences. "Escaping Velocity" refers to "putting ourselves out and opening ourselves up", and the skits are related to life on the street. The piece is nicely written and edited, and includes actualities from the performances and interviews with the group. I would have liked more performance clips in the piece...we don't hear any of the performance until more than half way through the piece. But it is nicelly set up, and a "talkback" section at the end takes questions from the audience. There is a language advisory, and although not gratuitous, a couple of words would have to be bleeped for broadcast, given the current climate at the FCC. Overall, I thought the piece flowed well and the excellent narration by the producer provided the transitions to keep it moving along nicely.

Comment for "Urban Homesteaders"

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Review of Urban Homesteaders

This is a nicely mixed, well-edited piece with good use of sound and actualities. Karen Brown's writing and narration is crisp and pleasing to listen to. I would have liked to get a feeling for whether the family that is attempting a homesteading style of life is actually having any fun doing it, but we do get a good picture of what they have accomplished in this feature. The only flaw in the piece for me was a jarring 15-second phone actuality at about 3:55 into the piece; it is the only phone interview in the piece and I think it would hold up just as well without it. Other than that, it is a nice sound portrait of what it is like to homestead in an inner-city neighborhood.

Comment for "Cocktails with Art Buchwald"

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Review of Cocktails with Art Buchwald

This first person essay is a nice reminiscence about an evening with Art Buchwald when the narrator was a student 30 years ago. It is well written and well read. I'm not sure it has a particular point to make other than to provide an enjoyable remembrance of some time spent with a legend, and it does it well.

Comment for "Zuni Running"

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Review of Zuni Running

This is a wonderful piece with a nice mix of narration, music, brief interviews, ambient sound and actualities. To my ear, it makes great use of sound without being overdone. I loved the short cuts of an out-of-breath runner and a "stick racer". The overall sound montage is very pleasing. Editing is tight, and the narration by Hal Cannon is just right. There is a natural break at approximately 4:45, so it could be divided into two equal parts that are each self-sufficient. I really like this piece, and highly recommend it.

Comment for "Vegan Gladiators"

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Review of Vegan Gladiators

This engaging piece is part of a series from Multiverse Radio, "a place where science and technology intersects with ingenuity, originality, society and the arts". I've listened to several of their pieces, and producer Jim Schultz and his team have tapped into an intriguing blend of science and society which is very well-written and listenable. These two minute pieces would fit well into an ATC magazine format.

Comment for "The Absolute Worst Thing"

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Review of The Absolute Worst Thing

May is National ALS Awareness Month, and this is a touching first person essay about living with ALS (otherwise known as Lou Gehrig's Disease). It opens and closes with the computer-generated voice of ALS sufferer Seth Carey, because the disease takes away use of the body and voice. Seth's uncle reads the middle of the essay. Seth imagines the absolute worst thing as being able to think and feel but unable to move, and that's the situation he finds himself in. It's a heart-rending piece that is very well written. The narration by Seth's uncle doesn't work well for me because of the vocal quality, and distracts from the piece, but overall it has a lot of impact in creating a mental picture of this disease.

Comment for "Recovering Lost Native American Languages"

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Review of Recovering Lost Native American Languages

This is a superbly produced feature on disappearing languages by producer Lonny Shavelson. Interviews with the last native speaker of the Elem Pomo native Californian language are very well done, and the quality of all the recordings and ambient sound is excellent. The piece is tightly edited and well mixed, and Shavelson's narration is just right for this feature. The production values are very similar to those of the NPR news magazines, the story is compelling, and the subject matter couldn't be more suited to radio. This is as good as any news magazine feature I have heard, and I would highly recommend it for broadcast.

Comment for "Lady Presidents"

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Review of Lady Presidents

Producer Amber Cortes does an admirable job of weaving together stories about the first ten women to run for U.S. President. It's a great piece of history, with narrator Christy Gast doing a fine job of reading excerpts from each of the histories. A music bed of varied and historic patriotic music runs throughout, and generally adds to the piece. Despite some occasional jarring edits and level changes, I think the piece hangs together well and is enjoyable to listen to. It's light hearted rather than overly serious, and contains a great deal of well-presented interesting historical information. Technical glitches are mainly related to a difference in sound and pacing from pieces that are edited together. I look forward to hearing more from this producer, with an eye towards improving the technical quality of her pieces.